There wasn't anything that would make this stick out for me as non-British (I was prepared for there to be some small things after the author's notes) That's good to hear. Well, the first commenter helped me make a number of small changes, so I'm glad they worked out.
I could easily imagine this playing out in life as it read. It was glorious in its delightfulness and the smaller details really helped sell it Excellent. Thank you. The temptation is, I'll admit, just to write a bunch of cute domestic scenes for the three of them--I could probably go on like that for a long while. I think, however, I'm going to have to put a plot into this. *grrr*
There was a nice level of 'something's not right' when Amy thought she could see her doll nodding back. When reading this, it made me ask 'what's going on?' and I like when small details in a story make me do that. Several people have remarked on that. I wrote it, I'll admit, as a throwaway bit, but now y'all have gotten me thinking about it and it's giving me ideas. I'm trying to decide how I want to go about writing/posting this. I think it's going to become quite complex, I sort of want the freedom to go back and change things whenever I want, to push things around. I'm not sure the standard posting in sections as you go along is going to work. But on the other hand, I like the feedback and have already gotten a bunch of good ideas based on the things people have asked--that is the advantage of writing things on the intenet.
Ok, sorry, rambling to myself here. Thank you for your thoughts!
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There wasn't anything that would make this stick out for me as non-British (I was prepared for there to be some small things after the author's notes)
That's good to hear. Well, the first commenter helped me make a number of small changes, so I'm glad they worked out.
I could easily imagine this playing out in life as it read. It was glorious in its delightfulness and the smaller details really helped sell it
Excellent. Thank you. The temptation is, I'll admit, just to write a bunch of cute domestic scenes for the three of them--I could probably go on like that for a long while. I think, however, I'm going to have to put a plot into this. *grrr*
There was a nice level of 'something's not right' when Amy thought she could see her doll nodding back. When reading this, it made me ask 'what's going on?' and I like when small details in a story make me do that.
Several people have remarked on that. I wrote it, I'll admit, as a throwaway bit, but now y'all have gotten me thinking about it and it's giving me ideas. I'm trying to decide how I want to go about writing/posting this. I think it's going to become quite complex, I sort of want the freedom to go back and change things whenever I want, to push things around. I'm not sure the standard posting in sections as you go along is going to work. But on the other hand, I like the feedback and have already gotten a bunch of good ideas based on the things people have asked--that is the advantage of writing things on the intenet.
Ok, sorry, rambling to myself here. Thank you for your thoughts!